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Doorbells elope with grape-colored Hope.
                Tissues embrace the exploding nose.

               elbows and knees   
                 sofas and trees
                                have swallowed me up before I said please.

And wedged in-between
       is my bloaty birthday
                                      where I waddled around
                                                               with glossy brown opals
                                                                                                  somersaulting in
                                                                                                                          my underwear.
                                                                                                                                                 
                                                                                                                                            Oh the World was merely Two.

Tiptoeing into Dali's hand --
                   I'm wriggling to the stars.
                   
                                       in his barbed eyelash fence --
                                               Love and Paint condense.

                                                         With Supple Sunsets left to give --
                                                                                                I have found an excuse to Live.

As semicolons roll            down my face
     I song my sing on the potatoe-skin page
                     and count the weather balloons
                            in my stained-glass brain.

                                                          The snowcapped swings will be screaming soon.

There is more than grease-avoidance.
There is more than barfing barcodes.
There is more than nose-runny anarchists scrubbing one-way signs to deepfry gold.

The body is not a cage.
                                    Gravity's wrapped in wool.
                                                                             and Love is a velcro ocean --
                                                                                                                         Oh lets drape the sails!  Kiss the fish!
                                                                                                                                        and climb the spiny rails!
                                                                                                                                                


As a drugdealer ignites his molten blight
   an innocent heart is holepunched tight.

In the nutmegged attic of a gingerbread house
                        a limelit Love begins to sprout.

                                                                      I'm a biscotti.
                                                                      You are the oven.
                                                                      Your eyes are speaking to me like calculus exams.

                                   When the winter's lungs are gingerly laced,
                                            the Plumbers dehydrate the governor's race.
                                                                
                                                                As toilets get clogged,
                                                                     and gobbles their jobs
            
                                                                                        the mat and the doorstep
                                                                                                                redivorce twice.

                                                                A zambini is yelping for Liberty again.
                                                                A lotion is applied to the wrinkled tent.

Below the parachutes of nosegay seeds,  
we stapled together a pretzeled love.

                your eyes were flashlights
                and in the skybound pleasure
and i think i heard them say :

(((Time is
a one-sided War

life's
a Sacrifice
©2005-2009 ~flappability
:iconflappability:

Author's Comments

A Perfect fishfin -- 12 . 23 . 05 | subconciously written 1:49 - 2:10 a.m. + concious editting the next morning | My Bed / My Dining Table | ~ 40 min

Screw Sleep. I'm going to see how tangled my thoughts become on a yawning, sleepless, tired, hungry 1:49 night when I can barely open my eyes.

First attempt at subconcious poetry with Christmas two days away. All I can remember is that I was awake enough to make my pencil pee, but sleepy enough to completely forget where I was with all five sense fading away. And I was very excited to see what this poem would turn out to be by the time I read it conciously the next morning.

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*dies* *flies* *laughs* *cries*
AHhhhhhhhhhhh.. this would be my first first ever DD. *explodes * *implodes* *farts hearts* *is grateful*
=zebrazebrazebra < -- puddle-wonderful friend!

*queenhrosie < -- inspiration-splattering flamingo poet!

Bright Eyes < -- a heart-filled with bittersweet inspirational emotion.

Daily Deviation

Given 2006-02-01

In A Perfect fishfin *flappability tells us she's found an excuse to Live - and you have thirty seconds to find an excuse to read this poem. Guided by her deft hand and hefty sense of humour you'll be sent through the wash-cycle of Life unharmed, but not unchanged. (Suggested by ~zebrazebrazebra and Featured by `imperfect)

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:iconqueenhrosie:
You're very pretty lately.

I like how you are so unafraid of ugly, in your poems. You make the ugly into pretty, so much, I guess.

*hmmm*

--
I hear
your voice
down the hall, through the window, above
all those trees, a light
it seems
& you are singing. What song
is that The words
are beautiful.

-LeRoi Jones
:iconpetula-faerie:
yes!! screw sleep!!!!!!

"Oh the World was merely Two." NICE

i find it a little wordy, but still really really good.

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ideals... deception... humanity...
[link]
:iconflappability:
Wow.. yeah...
I just realized that.
I am describing poop as brown, glossy opals!

and I'm describing all the ugliness that tangles up this world with a lot of flowy adjectives. The kind that just flows jumpily with the toungue...

But thank you! :hug:

Have you ever tried "subconcious poetry" before?

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-- F.
"like two mammoths tusk-locked in ernest sport at the edge of the advancing ice age, you were my mystery and i was your mystery and in time we discovered that mystery was our home."
-l.cohen
:iconlilithlairpoetry:
Love the structure and style of writing presented! This is why I get inspired to write these types of poems instead of the usual mainstream that gets scorned upon by the seniors here...anyways, thanks for sharing!

--
Clubs
*Circleoffriends=DailyDeviants~Lullaby-Poetry~invisible-inc~OpinionatedHell~PoetsClub~The-Red-Envelope
:iconflappability:
Thanks! To be honest, I don't really know where my style or my odd word choice came from. All I know is that a lot of different kinds of inspirations from nifty songs, famous poets, emotional poetry, piled on top of each other to give me the inspiration of my ideas.
But the structure, and the style and the word choice sort of just happened. I think I always had this desire to perk up my structure and word choice as originally as I possibly could. One day, I just decided to use really odd word choice -- I started to write things like "wobbly poems," "nutmegged love," "my pencil can pee poetry!" and it sort of just branched out from there.

And the music of Bright Eyes has inspired me a lot.

Thanks for the comment.

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-- F.
"like two mammoths tusk-locked in ernest sport at the edge of the advancing ice age, you were my mystery and i was your mystery and in time we discovered that mystery was our home."
-l.cohen
:iconlilithlairpoetry:
Tis where our inspiration comes from,, only that we strive to make it better than the original. I love your style and your brave experimentation with structure!

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Clubs
*Circleoffriends=DailyDeviants~Lullaby-Poetry~invisible-inc~OpinionatedHell~PoetsClub=The-Red-Envelope
:iconzebrazebrazebra:
Can I drown in your words, please?
:iconeviloatmeal:
Wow... That had a very special effect on me: I started out somehow laid back in my chair, to the point of nearly sliding under the table, but when i finished reading i realised my nose was not far from touching the screen.... hmm... that was great, you managed to put like... the whole world into the tiny confines of one poem, and you managed to stretch a poem onto the gigantic canvas that is the width of the screen, it's undescribably great! i feel like i've watched a movie of sorts.. one of those that show you all the miserable people on earth, and how they are happier than us wealthy people in wealthy nations.... or something... it's very weird. Anyway, this was inspiring, I had planned on trying to write something in near future, so yeah, inspiration! I think I'll make a poem :) about something nice... and timeless ...ooh.. I'll make two poems! anywaaaay...rambleramble :+fav: bye!

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Just so you know; I have this habit of not finishing things that I s....
:iconduhastmeish:
wowzza.

--
"I'd rather be hated for who I am, then loved for who I am not" -Kurt Cobain
Every day is exactly the same
:iconz3r0t0lerance:
awesome presentation! awesome words too! and i really really like your preview pic. :D

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