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-taco

That was beautiful. Ver very moving... from the fireworks and onward, I was completely snared by your poem, and it has left me... feeling.

thank you.

I have probably writen about fifteen poems about made up Love & relationships by now.

I'm glad that I can create things that can touch people. Thanks for the awesome comment as usual!

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"like two mammoths tusk-locked in ernest sport at the edge of the advancing ice age, you were my mystery and i was your mystery and in time we discovered that mystery was our home."
-l.cohen}

The imagery is poignant in the minds that visualize each line verbatim. I found it quite appealing as well as the structure of the poem!!

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Clubs
*Circleoffriends=DailyDeviants~Lullaby-Poetry~invisible-inc~OpinionatedHell~PoetsClub=The-Red-Envelope

I noticed a theme of things trying to close the two people in.

I woke one evening
in a refrigerator

and they found a way to accomodate themselves or escape.
The stop sign couldnt control them, and they simply flew above it. Their veins were controlling the outside rather than being controlled by their walls.

things bottled their minds, worry webbed around them

As we darted away,
getting stabbed by Age,

and they always escaped.

I love it.

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Harmonize your inward and your outward life, and you soul will know no bounds of joy.

wow.. i love your poetry interpretations. They're almost exactly the meanings that i wanted to depict.
It's alway so heart-spankingly wonderful to read your feedbacks.

Thank you so much for dragging your fingers across the keyboard and applying pressure to each individual one just for the sake of commenting.

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"like two mammoths tusk-locked in ernest sport at the edge of the advancing ice age, you were my mystery and i was your mystery and in time we discovered that mystery was our home."
-l.cohen}

You know. Call this off topic but I love the way you talk. I hope to god you're the only one who ever says anything is "heart-spankingly wonderful" because the originality of it all is just too perfect to repeat.

I know every time I read one of your comments that something is going to make me smile.
Something, every time.

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Harmonize your inward and your outward life, and you soul will know no bounds of joy.

woah....! way to cool! beautifully written. I like it!

"our veins had begun to steer the trees" we depend the oxygen they trees feed us yet just by living humans tend to destroy them... I guess that's just a realists poin of view though... heh...

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Peace, Love and Chaos.

wahh....thank you.

It took a long time to develop this languagey thing... I started talking very oddly in... 7th grade. So yeah. two years.


I usually just kind of ingrain words that sound cool and crunchy into my vocabulary,a nd start braiding them together in odd ways.

here is a very.. odd quote that I wrote...

''We eat emotion. We eat it. Slip it into our thoats as it soaks into our hearts.
But what goes in must always come out. Therefore, when the emotion has clogged our hearts for such an insanely long time - - it needs an outlet.
Therefore emotion decides to tumble into our butt.
AS we sit on the toilet in the morning's wobbling light - - we poop emotion.
POOP = art :: because they're both solid with varying colors

Or we pee, emotion out.
PEE = poetry :: because they both flow.
Or we fart it out
MUSIC = fart :: because they're both sopping-wet in SOUND -- and cannot be visibly seen."

and personally i think that conor oberst' fart is exceptionally good!

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"like two mammoths tusk-locked in ernest sport at the edge of the advancing ice age, you were my mystery and i was your mystery and in time we discovered that mystery was our home."
-l.cohen}